The text that I want to discuss is task number 3 – Visual text analysis. The task was to choose one of three questions and write an essay answering that question. The question I chose to answer was Q1) Explain how an essay has explored an idea.

Ms Watt commented that my essay had an engaging fluency – which is something that I tried to work on while I was writing my drafts because I have a tendency to repeat the same thing over three sentences when I only need one sentence. I was proud of my introduction because it was clear, to the point and, encouraged the reader to keep reading. Another strength in this piece is that I used lots of facts and evidence from the film. This made it even clearer to the reader what I was writing about, and help them understand. Ms Watt commented that my points were well-argued which is because of the evidence and the data that I used.

I am proud of this essay because it was one of my first essays and the structure and composition of the argument exceeded my expectations. I put lots of effort into this piece of work. I got my mum to point out to me where what I was saying didn’t flow or make sense and I wrote several drafts. As well as the important part of writing the essay, I took lots of notes on the film and re-watched several parts of it to get the exact quotes and examples and data.

Something that I would improve on in this essay is I would cut out unnecessary sentences. An example of this is in my third paragraph I stated “A quote from…”. This broke the fluency of the essay and didn’t help argue my point so in hindsight I wouldn’t use it. On the flip side, I tried hard to use a range of vocabulary and structure my sentences properly.